This week’s writing challenge is hosted by Vincent Mars, who challenges us to write a story of only 50 words in length. Weeks ago I might have thought this impossible, but Friday Fictioneers has helped me tremendously in cutting out excess words. I’ve never posted poetry here before, so I thought I’d take this opportunity. I’m sure what I’ve written violates all the rules of poetry, but I’m not aiming to become a professional in any sense. I’ve mostly posted fiction so far, but today I decided to express some feelings that have been bouncing around in my heart for some time.
I imagined years from now, we’d still be living the magic of life.
Waking with smiles, kissing in the rain, and dancing in candlelight.
Already jaded, the music’s gone, though I still listen for a tune.
You don’t seem to notice, or even care, but maybe you will in June.
Thanks for reading,
Adelie
That’s great – I love the bittersweet feeling to this and that last line made me smile. Magic has a way of sneaking up on us as long as we keep looking for it and hoping.
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Oh, thanks so much for reading, Sheila! I’m glad that I was able to make you smile! Yes, I believe there’s always hope. 🙂 Thanks again for the wonderful response!
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Your words carry meaning and truth. Thank you for sharing!
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Wow, thank you so much for taking the time to read and for leaving such a thoughtful comment!
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This is wonderful. Short and very sweet.
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Thank you so very much for reading and for leaving such kind words!
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I’d say you you’ve done VERY well!
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Thank you so very much for reading and for leaving such a kind comment!
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A sparkling gem! Love the third line especially, as that’s when the poem turns on a dime (or should I say a fifty cent piece!) Great work – – this is super hard to do! You don’t see me doing this. But I’ve kicked myself fifty times now. ‘-)
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Oh, Stephanie! You’re too kind! I greatly appreciate your praise, you know it means the world to me! I’ve been all over the place lately, but I’m glad to see your fifty challenge is up- Going to read it now!!!! 😀
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Poetry or not? Who cares? It has emotion in just 50 words. Great!
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Thank you so much for reading and for sharing your wonderful thoughts!
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LOVE this!! Great job ❤
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Thank you so very much for reading and for taking the time to leave such a sweet comment!
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I wonder…whats the connection with June..? ( if you want to share) I loved it… it moved me…Hugs!
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Thank you so very much for reading and for commenting. Honestly, June is the month of my wedding anniversary. So, the poem really came out of feelings I’ve been holding in for quite some time. Also, June tends to be the beginning of the beautiful weather (in Michigan, at least), so I thought it would make a general connection with changing seasons as well. I really appreciate your curiosity and thoughtful comment!
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Honestly the first guess I Had was that it was your wedding anniversary. .so congrats for writing such a personal post and I hope you will find happiness in all your steps. Hugs!
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Hi Adelie! I enjoy the beauty in your work. The third line is my fave it has so much drama. Agree with Scentofrina, there is a real fascination here of June. I’m linking it to seasons and optimism of a Summer. Well done!
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Well hello, Lita! I’m touched that you read my poem and left such a lovely comment. I love your expansion on the symbolism of June, and you hit it spot on! Additional significance of June is that it’s my wedding anniversary. These feelings have been nearly bursting at the seams of my heart for a while, so finally getting them out there has been a relief. I never expected people might actually enjoy reading it, so that’s great too! Thanks, again!
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Ah that’s excellent news! (although the post works well without knowing this). There is a strong feeling to the words, they are a worthy tribute to an important celebration. Well done!
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This is beautiful! I know you’ve heard that a few times already, given the wonderful comments you’ve received – but really…I felt it!
More Poetry, Please!
🙂
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Oh you’re truly too kind, and I greatly value your input and praise! Thank you so much for your encouragement, and if I do feel poetic in the future, maybe I’ll write a poem about you! 😛
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simply beautiful. You nailed this challenge
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Thank you so much for reading and for leaving such a kind comment! 🙂
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You’re welcome. Thanks for sharing
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I love this! You have a talent for saying so much while using so few words! I *felt* this poem. You should explore with poetry some more…you did a great job! 🙂
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Oh thank you so much. Your encouragement and praise mean the world to me, being that they are coming from a poetry master! 😀
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You’re welcome! Lol, far from a master…but maybe one day! 😀
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Dear Adelie, Very well penned! I love it and it fits many lives. Good job! Nan 🙂
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Thank you so much for reading and for the wonderful comment. Poetry definitely isn’t my forte, but I’m definitely in the process of sharpening the skill (or at least trying to)! I try to find a balance between making my writing personal but also leaving parts of it open for interpretation. ! greatly appreciate the positive feedback 😀
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